Danneel & JJ drawing - help!

[amberdreams]

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Originally posted by amberdreams at Danneel & JJ drawing - help!

I am not sure why I keep trying portraits.... I was vaguely thinking I might give this to Jensen BUT I am not sure about it. Is it a good enough likeness? I can see how I can do a little more with Danneel's hair, but is there anything I can do to improve both faces and get them more correct?

I've done my usual and made Danneel's face too long and thin, and I'm not exactly sure what I've done wrong with JJ - so any help would be appreciated, including draw-overs. Bear in mind the paper is fairly rough and rubbing out knackers the surface.


I can also see Danneel's mouth is not right...
I'm thinking of adding JJ's hand coming out towards the viewer (which might serve a dual purpose as it might help distract from the inaccurate faces LOL!)
From this photo ref

Comments

[jj1564.livejournal.com]

Hi m'dear, I'm no artist and I'm amazed by your talent! It's lovely but I can see a problem with JJ - the gap between her eyes and nose is too long, also her smile should be wider. Hope that helps :)

[fufaraw]

JJ's eyes should be wider apart, and shadow under them to make the apples of her cheeks pop. Soft shadows just above and along her upper lids will make her eyes a little deeper set, and they'll appear larger. Also shadow along the left side of her forehead and up under her hair to make her forehead round out some.

Danneel's eyebrows are heavier than you've drawn them, though you have the shape almost perfect--they need to be wider top to bottom--draw in a few more hairs under the arch of the brow to flatten that arch, just a touch. The shadows under her eyes need to reach lower on her face to open up the eye socket a little. And her teeth are larger than you've drawn them. Making them bigger will open up her smile just a little bit--and you can arch the left side of her upper lip a tiny bit to expose slightly more gum--it will make her smile a lot more relaxed and natural.

I'd take out the shadow you have to the left of her chin--it makes the chin look longer than in the photo, and more pronounced. Enlarging and relaxing the mouth a little and eliminating the chin-shadow will bring her lower face more into proportion.

The bones are all there, and they're fantastic. What I'm suggesting are mere tweaks.

[sillie]

Okay, some quick things I'm seeing are that both their mouths are a tad to small. Danneels teeth should be a little bigger I think, and JJ's mouth should be a little broader. I also think you drew Danneels chin a tad to strong.
More shading in the faces will create some more depth. Shading the face is a scary thing (I know, it's one of the things I struggled with for a long time), but I really think it'll help.
I love the way you drew the hair, btw! Anyway, good luck with this. Portrait drawing is hard and is a long process of moulding and shaving and most importantly, really looking. Good luck! :D

[matchboximpala.livejournal.com]

This is pretty damn good! But I see the same things that were pointed out in the other comments -- especially JJ's smile and Danneel's chin.

[dizzojay.livejournal.com]

I think this is great, you've really captured the intimacy between them.

Just a couple of sggestions from me; I think with JJ, I would deepen the shading around her eyes, that area looks a little bit flat, and doing so would bring out the bridge of her nose and her cheekbones. Also, I think the lower half of her face is a shade too long. In the photo, her eyes (I haven't measured this, visual judgement only) are about perfectly midway down her face, if anything fractionally over halfway down her face. Yours are above the halfway point and that givves the illusion of lengthening her face.

In terms of Danneel, I can't see too much wrong except that maybe her chin is a bit too square.

Great work so far!

[milly-gal.livejournal.com]

This is pretty impressive but I see the same things pointed out already, it's so easy to find the smallest of details changing the whole shape of a subjects face *hugs* you'll get there in the end honey.