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Unconsoled
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E/O Drabble Challenge: word count 100
Challenge word: old
Warnings: I have no idea what this is. I feel I should apologise for the weirdness.
Summary: All alone, Sam encounters an ancient monster.

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Cold. Wind freezes the blood, slows his heart beat until his knees
Fold. Crumpling, shaking, he falls. Tumbles, rolls, hits rock and stills. Then the creature grows
Bold. It comes out from the shadows, moving like smoke. His eyelids flutter. Its breath smells of
Mold. Its tongue flickers out, tastes his warm blood. It hisses its pleasure, a tale never
Told. He doesn’t want to become another victim, but the creature is so strong, so vicious, so very
Old. Sam, it hisses. It doesn’t matter any more, as Sam lets go his
Hold.
Consciousness slips away.

Sam’s soul is sold.


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Date: 2014-06-08 09:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] quickreaver.livejournal.com
The format of this is GREAT! The impact on certain words, the visceral quality of the descriptions. Really potent!

Date: 2014-06-08 09:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amberdreams.livejournal.com
Thank you! I really wasn't sure if it worked as anything at all, you know? I can go to bed happy now then. *nods*

Date: 2014-06-08 10:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ephermeralk.livejournal.com
Ridiculously creepy! I love it!

Date: 2014-06-09 07:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amberdreams.livejournal.com
Phew. Thank you!

Date: 2014-06-08 10:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] ash48.livejournal.com
Poetry is what it is! Beautiful, vivid and creepy as hell. And clever. Love it.


Date: 2014-06-09 07:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amberdreams.livejournal.com
Okies, I'll take that - thankee kindly!

Date: 2014-06-08 10:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] tifaching.livejournal.com
I liked it!

Date: 2014-06-09 07:25 am (UTC)

Date: 2014-06-08 10:52 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jj1564.livejournal.com
Oh that was really different, creepy and so atmospheric, I love the way each line starts and you have conveyed so much in so few words. Loved it!

Date: 2014-06-09 07:25 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amberdreams.livejournal.com
Different, yup. Thank you!!

Date: 2014-06-09 12:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] balder12.livejournal.com
Ooh! So very creepy and almost Lovecraftian.

Date: 2014-06-09 07:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amberdreams.livejournal.com
I confess, I've never read Lovecraft ... but that is a cool compliment, thank you!

Date: 2014-06-09 02:13 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chomaisky.livejournal.com
Sam!!!
Your drabbles are heartbreakers...

Date: 2014-06-09 07:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amberdreams.livejournal.com
Aw thank you! (Sorry about your heart...)

Date: 2014-06-09 08:09 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] mangacat201.livejournal.com
Oh, that is mysterious and poetic and damn. So many interpretations!

Date: 2014-06-09 09:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] amberdreams.livejournal.com
Thank you, that's great feedback.

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