Riddle me this - a drabble

[amberdreams]

This was a weird one - I half liked, half hated it but posted it on FF.net anyway, so thought I might as well make you lot suffer it too.

Riddle me this
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E/O Drabble Challenge: word count 100
Challenge word: temporary
Warnings: none (experimental?)
Summary: Playing with words – Sam and Dean.
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What is Sam?
a temporary measure with a gun half-cocked
a good intention but a priest defrocked
an elastic band, stretched until it snaps
a closed book inside a perfect storm
a bone of contention without a norm

What is Dean?
an open invitation with a folded map
a frayed bootstrap, a simple mishap
a main attraction, a man of action
an unknown soldier without a guide
a gentle declension, a downward slide

Alone, out of synch, attrition wears them down.
Waves rise, winds howl, one of them will drown.
United they are mighty, a warrior family.
Together they are Winchesters.

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If anyone feels in the mood to concrit, feel free because I'm still not comfortable with it (mostly the last part I think) so would welcome thoughts.

Comments

[siennavie.livejournal.com]

I really like this! The imagery is lovely and fitting for each brother. I'm not knowledgeable about poetry, so my feedback doesn't get much deeper than this :)

[amberdreams.livejournal.com]

I know nothing about poetry either. LOL! It's enough that you found something you liked in it. Thanks!